Beginning to piece a story together how's this ..

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Beginning to piece a story together how's this for one of the descriptions of character so far .. The tank top gripped just under her protruding collar bone and firmly held her petite waist. Her pipe jeans crinkled at the ends as she spun to face me. Looking plain as yogurt and unmistakably dressed on a student budget Josephine's cheeks radiated confidence .... Any criticisms welcome

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A fantastic and highly descriptive piece Hun! Well done!!ðððð

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@michga thank you I'm stuck thinking about what to put next hopefully in time I'll have seem more

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Looks good to me ð

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This is brilliantly written! The description is set out beautifully and it really gives a clear image of the character. I'd love to read more of this story. ð

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Miichaela

Lisa Roberts

Tom

some dumb kid.