#household I sit and stare at it the magical thi..

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#household I sit and stare at it the magical thing hanging on the dark wall, it's green eyes staring down, controlling me, I am pulled into its powers and the trouble begins... It all started when mum came back from America bringing present for all of us, a sewing kit for Lucy, tool box for dad, books for Maddie, chocolate for Thomas, and a painting for me. I loved this painting with the bright colours and detailed face, but, as time went on its secrets began to appear.

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@liberty

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Please tell me what to improve @liberty

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Comment: This is really good

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Criticism: describe more using more literary techniques (I sound so much like my English teacher) but really this is greatð

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@aceace64 This is great!! Are you going to carry on??

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@liberty @meggie2012 thanks. It depends if I win or not... Jokes!!!

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You should carry on I want to know what happens next ð

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Come on, carry it on! Please?!

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@meggie2012 r u doing this one?

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@aceace64 no, I usually do young writers household.

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Do this one ASWELL AS

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.......ok. I'll try.

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This certainly inspires a whole load of stories. It's short and magical

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